Thứ Bảy, 30 tháng 7, 2016

Task2 - Analysing an essay about happiness

Essays band 9:  

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It is extraordinarily hard to find a single definition of happiness as many philosophers have discovered. This is partly because it is a complex concept and partly because individuals vary. Although it is equally difficult to be definitive about what factors are needed for it, money and a good relationship are two key components.


One reason why it is difficult to define happiness is that it comprises a variety of different states and emotions. At one level, it can be the gentle feeling of contentment which comes from being in a good relationship, but then it can also include for example  the more immediate feeling of joy when one passes an exam. Another problem in defining it is that it can vary with culture, age and personal preference. For example, a young male from a privileged background in the UK may view it quite differently from an older female in Africa living in circumstances where the next meal is rather more important than the latest Xbox.

It is not really possible to list all the factors that are necessary to happiness. I would say, however, that the two most universal are probably having enough money and being in a good relationshipMoney matters simply because a significant proportion of unhappiness is caused by poverty and it helps to have enough to get by on. Relationships matter because man is a social animal and we are most affected by the people we spend our life with.

In conclusion, I would say that although it is impossible to find one definition of happiness as it is so complex, it is possible to say that money and love are among the factors that help foster it.


Introduction 
             extraordinarily hard to find a single definition of happiness :  
Conclusion
             I would say that although it is impossible to find one definition of happiness as it is so complex
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             one reason why - another problem - for example
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             show the two factors

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